This is the next sample of my Voltron: Legendary Defender Fanfiction. As always if you have any constructive criticism please leave them in the comments so I can see them.
~Sample Start~
By the time I get there, I see that the others woke up Allura, and it looks like Lance was trying to hit on her because now she has him in a restraining hold by his ear. That’s my girl. “Who are you? Where is King Alfor? What are you doing in my castle?” I clear my throat, “Didn’t I teach you a better hold?” Everyone looks at me as I stand in the doorway, and Allura lets Lance go, “Auntie!” Allura runs to me and hugs me tightly, and I hug her back just as tight.
I hear everyone question, “Auntie?” Allura lets me go and I walk to the group with more confidence than I had before, “I remember who I was and who I am. I am an alien. My people are called Sirens, we live for far longer than humans and other species. I am a paladin of Voltron and I pilot the purple lion.” Allura walks up to me, “Auntie did you bring these people here?” I look at Allura a sigh slightly, “Allura, I lost my memories 2 years ago. I had visions of memories but I couldn’t put them together. We found the purple and blue lions on Earth, they brought us here.” Allura looks at me confused, “But… then what happened to the blue lion’s paladin?” I look away from Allura.
“Auntie?” I take a breath, “He’s… gone Allura.” Allura shakes slightly and goes to the control panel and turns it on and I hear Pidge say from behind me, “Oh so that’s how it works.” The other sleep pod opens and Coran falls out but he catches himself. He looks around the room quickly and shouts, “E-enemy combatants! I’ll help you, Stella!” I slightly roll my eyes, “Stand down Coran.” I can’t help but chuckle and I hear Allura, “It can’t be…” Coran looks at Allura and asks, “What is it?” I look at Allura and listen silently, “We’ve been asleep for 10,000 years!” I walk to Allura and hold her hand.
“I’m sorry I didn’t come and wake you before. I had to make sure the purple lion would be safe. And after I did, I-I hit my head and lost my memories…” Hunk voices a concern, “Wait a minute, are you saying you’re over 10,000 years old?” I turn to face Hunk and let go of Allura’s hand, “Hunk, don’t you know it’s rude to ask a woman about her age? But, yes. I am way over 10,000 years old, I did say my species lives far longer than humans. Allura, Coran, I’m sorry but Altea and all the planets in your solar system are gone… Alfor is…” I start to tear up and clench my fists, “Alfor is… gone… I’m sorry… I couldn’t protect Altea…” I close my eyes trying to hold back the tears and I feel someone’s hand on my shoulder, I open my eyes and see it’s Coran. “You did everything you could Stella, I saw you that day.” I wipe my tears and Coran moves his hand away. “Sorry for being emotional, I’ve had quite a day today.”
I see out of the corner of my eye that Allura is furious, “Zarkon!” I take a breath to collect myself and I hear Shiro ask, “Zarkon…?” It might not be a good idea for me to speak about Zarkon. We have… a lot of history together. Allura answers, “He was the King of the Galra 10,000 years ago. A vile creature and enemy to all free people.” He was and still is. But now I think we can stop him, I will not fail again. Shiro speaks up again, “I remember now… I was his prisoner.” My eyes widen, so that’s why they came to Earth. They weren’t tracking the lions, they were following Shiro. I remember the conditions of that place and tears swell up in my eyes, but I quickly wipe them away. I hear Allura, “He’s still alive? That’s impossible.” I speak up, “I don’t understand how either but he is very much still alive.” Shiro adds, “He’s looking for a superweapon called ‘Voltron.’”
I take a glance at the group, “He’s looking for Voltron because he knows it’s the only thing that can defeat him. Which is why we are going to it first.” I see Coran leave the room but the rest of us stay in the Sleep Chamber. I see Allura typing on the console in front of the sleep pods. I start to walk to Allura but I’m stopped by Pidge, “So you’re an alien?” I nod, “Yeah, I’m half Siren and half Celestial. Though not Celestial like you think.” I can tell by Pidge’s facial expression he looks excited, “Tell me more.” I think for a moment, “Well My Celestial half is more that I’m in tune with the stars, so depending on the planet, I can read the stars for prophecies.” Pidge looks amazed, “Wow.” Coran walks back into a room and has some green food goo, I usually have good memory but I can’t remember what Alfor called it. Coran takes the bowl towards Allura, “Princess it’s been 10,000 years, you should eat something.” I walk towards them and I hear Allura tell Coran, “I’m not hungry.” I hold one of Allura’s hands, “Come on Allura, how about I make you something that isn’t… pureéd?” I look at the food goo questioningly.
I then hear Shiro comment, “I can’t believe your civilization created such advanced technology 10,000 years ago. It must have been an incredible place.” I don’t need to look at Coran and Allura to know they are mourning, but Coran says, “Yes it was… but now it’s gone and we are the last two Alteans alive.” I feel Allura slightly shaking so I pull her into a hug and try my best to comfort her. Allura hugs me back and then we hear a squeak from behind us. Allura leaves my embrace and walks to the sleep pod she was in, “It looks like we aren’t the last Alteans after all.” I look over and see a few mice that squeak. Suddenly there is an alarm, I turn and see the console is red with a warning on the screen. The screen shows a Galra battleship and I hear Coran, “A Galra battleship has set its tracker on us.” I start to feel my heart beat faster and my chest tightens lightly. I hear Allura ask worriedly, “How did they find us?!” I take a few deep breaths and try to calm down, doing so I hear but don’t listen to what’s being said around me.
When I calm down and now listen I hear Shiro, and see that he is separating Lance and Keith, “Stow it cadets! Now is not the time to place blame, it’s time we work as a team. How long until they arrive?” I see Coran put up his fingers to probably help him with math and hear him say, “At their speed? Uh, oh, well, carry 2… I’d say about a couple of days?” I take a look at everyone in the room, it is becoming very clear this will be the next team of paladins. I hear Allura now next to me say, “Good. Let them come! By the time they get here, you six will have reformed Voltron, and together, we will destroy Zarkon’s empire.” Almost right after Allura finishes speaking Hunk burps, and by the mess on his face I can see he was eating the… food? Hunk apologizes, “Haha… sorry. Food goo.” Shiro then addresses Allura, “Princess, there are 6 of these lions, how are we going to find the rest?” I look at Allura and start walking to the Bridge of the Castleship.
I walk into the room and for a moment when I walk in I see a memory of all the other paladins happily here in the Bridge and I tear up slightly, and my heart aches. My friends… I suddenly snap back to reality when I hear Coran’s voice “Stella? Are you ok?” I look up and see that Allura is standing in the middle of the room and the others are standing in the slightly lower area in front of Allura. “Y-yes Coran. I’m alright.” I walk and join Coran beside the boys and watch as Allura activates the crystal above her and turns on the computer and displays a holographic map of the universe. My eyes drift to two planets, Symphony and Celeste, both of my homes. I hear Pidge say, “These-These are coordinates. It looks like the black lion is where the blue and purple lions are.” I nod, “That’s right Pidge. That’s because the Black lion is here in the castle. To keep the Black lion safe from…” My facial expression changes quickly to realization then to remorse. I hear Coran pick up where I left off, “That's why to keep the Black lion safe, King Alfor locked the Black lion in the castle. It can only be freed when the other five lions are present.” I clear my throat and straighten my posture, “Yes, um, thank you, Coran. Would you like to explain the bonds, my little snowflake?” I look towards Allura and I see that I made her blush slightly. “O-Of course Auntie. As the rest of you have probably learned, the Lions choose their pilots. There is a mystical bond between the lions and their pilots that cannot be forced. The Quintessence of the lion is mirrored in their pilots. Together, they form something greater than science can explain.”
I walk next to Allura and smile, “I think I can help with this next part, my little snowflake.” Allura looks at me and smiles. “If you’re sure, Auntie.” I face the boys and move the Black lion hologram to Shiro, “The Black lion needs a pilot who is a natural-born leader, and someone the others will follow. That’s why you will pilot the Black lion Shiro.” I turn and move the Green lion hologram to Pidge. “The Green lion is very inquisitive, it needs a pilot who is daring and intelligent. That’s why you will pilot the Green lion Pidge. The Blue lion-” Lance interrupts, “Let me guess, the Blue lion takes the most handsome/best pilot of the bunch?” I look at Lance slightly annoyed and clear my throat before moving on. I turn and move the Yellow lion hologram to Hunk. “The um, the Yellow lion is kind and caring. Its pilot is someone who puts other needs above their own. His heart must be mighty, as the leg of Voltron, you will lift the team up and hold them together.” I see Hunk pointing at himself looking a bit confused. I look at Allura, “Snowflake, I take it you haven’t located the Red lion yet?” Allura shakes her head, “Not yet Auntie. I think there may be something wrong with the castle, it has been 10,000 years after all.” I nod and turn to Keith and create a hologram of the Red lion and move it to Keith. “Regardless, we will find the Red lion. The Red lion is temperamental, it’s the most difficult of all the lions. While it is faster and more agile than the other lions, it’s also more unstable. The red lion needs someone who relies more on instinct than skills alone. Keith, you will pilot the red lion.” Lance points at Keith and glares at him, “What this guy?” Keith returns Lance’s glare.
I take a breath and my left eyebrow slightly twitches. “We’ll work on finding the red lion as soon as possible. Won’t we Coran?” Coran chuckles and salutes, “Yes ma’am. They don’t call me the ‘Coranic’ for nothing.” He has a proud smile and I respond, “Coran. No one calls you that. And for the record, that joke was a little forced.” Coran now looks slightly embarrassed. Oh darn was I too blunt again? I thought I had fixed that years ago. I slightly frown for a second before I return to my serious expression, and tap the purple lion hologram that is near me, and the lion holograms roar and run towards each other into a V formation. “When we unite the lions we will be able to form Voltron-” Allura interrupts me, “The most powerful warrior ever known.” I slightly smile seeing how much Allura believes in Voltron and clear my throat. “The defender of the universe.” The holograms change to show Voltron and the hologram is now tall enough to fill the room. The hologram lasts a few seconds before it turns off and I hear Hunk remark, “Awesome. But wait so we’re going to be in there and flying lions, got that part. How do lions turn into legs? Also, is this going to be a long trip? I have to pee. Do you people pee?” I sigh and answer Hunk’s questions.
I then continue to say, “But we have to hurry and get the lions before the Galra get here.” I can feel myself slightly shaking but I try to keep my composure, “Lance, you and Hunk will go and get the yellow lion. Shiro, I think you and Pidge should go and get the Green Lion. I’ll stay and help Coran and Allura in the search for the red lion. As soon as we have a location I’ll let you know Keith.” I quickly walk out of the room but I hear Shiro say, “Ok, sounds like a solid plan.” before I get out of earshot. I walk out of the room and walk a bit down the hallway and press my back against the wall. I try to stifle the tears in my eyes and cover my face, I try to take calming breaths but I find myself choked up. I try my hardest to not cry but I’m unsuccessful, the tears start flowing and I quietly cry. I lose the strength to stand and slide down to the floor leaning on the wall behind me for any support.
~Sample End~